What do you think of my poem so far?

Jamaican Lifestyle








The country Jamaica


Is filled with blue seas


And beautiful palm trees.


From sunny breezes


To holiday hurricanes


Although Occasionally it does rain,


This country may be your next favorite spot.


And yes, it does get hot,


But don’t worry the weather is usually fair


Besides, the beach is over there





The country Jamaica


Is filled with curious tourists


Some groups have exciting skits


To watch or to be in


It doesn’t matter what color your skin is


It’s what you bring to the table.


Jamaicans tell stories, which has morals and fables


Not every Jamaican is a criminal, you know


Although their skin color is the same as a crow,


Most of them are friendly humans


Man or woman.





im not sure about the last stanza or watever it is i like it though im just not sure about getting an A on it. btw this is my history poem, k? feel free to comment/suggest some changes. only serious answers!

What do you think of my poem so far?
If this is for school... then for ur age.. u are very broad minded..





it is very good..


take care..
Reply:it's pretty good


i like it.
Reply:Your rhyming pattern is a bit out there as it is not very structured, but it seems to work somewhat. I think you need to fix up your diction, and rhyming since the structure is poor. Your poem sounds a bit choppy, and does not have a very strong flow. I think you will understand if you read it over. Overall it is pretty good, just make sure to watch your word choice. This is a good basis poem, so try to work off of it.
Reply:Pretty good.
Reply:It doesn't sound like a poem, it sounds more like a physical description of jamaica. you have to let it flow more, it's too robotic.
Reply:Its soooooo longgggggggg. But very interesting talking about Jamaican lifestyle which is simply a fact.