*memories*
that night was the beginning
i had never done something so painful
i let myslef hold in the hurt
but it needed to be let out......
i searched for something sharp
that would surrender my pain
i found it and cut
and let my tears fall like rain
it soothed my heart and scarred my skin
but let everything out that was locked up within
my life the next day was painfully the same
all i could hear was the repeat of his name
so i did it once more
and hurt like before
the red was my relief
the tears a belief
it was another escape
an excuse to get out
i lie every night thinking
with feelings of doubt
it never got easier
i just learned to better deal
and let myself cry so i wouldn't have to feel
i was depressed everyday
but never let it show
there was only one way out
and for me i would *go*
If u dont like dark poems then dont read!!! opinions on this poem??but plz serious answers only!?
i like the darkness of it but i think it's a little rhyme-y. you don't need to rhyme dark poetry. just say what you feel even if the words don't sound alike.
Reply:you have talent.
writing about it is a good way to relieve some stress. at least, it was for me.
Reply:I think the poem is well done, it appears to capture true anguish and pain.
Reply:Great !! I think that it's not so much a dark poem, as it is a release of feelings buried deep within your soul.... Do you have more? I would love to read them.
Reply:Although it is a bit depressing, in the same aspect it is beautiful. Nicely worded.
Reply:...i can rarely write happy poems....so i like your style...i thought it was very good and it makes perfect sense...i really like the pattern...= )
shamrock
No comments:
Post a Comment