Wednesday, July 21, 2010

If u dont like dark poems then dont read!!! opinions on this poem??but plz serious answers only!?

*memories*





that night was the beginning


i had never done something so painful


i let myslef hold in the hurt


but it needed to be let out......








i searched for something sharp


that would surrender my pain


i found it and cut


and let my tears fall like rain


it soothed my heart and scarred my skin


but let everything out that was locked up within


my life the next day was painfully the same


all i could hear was the repeat of his name


so i did it once more


and hurt like before


the red was my relief


the tears a belief


it was another escape


an excuse to get out


i lie every night thinking


with feelings of doubt


it never got easier


i just learned to better deal


and let myself cry so i wouldn't have to feel


i was depressed everyday


but never let it show


there was only one way out


and for me i would *go*

If u dont like dark poems then dont read!!! opinions on this poem??but plz serious answers only!?
i like the darkness of it but i think it's a little rhyme-y. you don't need to rhyme dark poetry. just say what you feel even if the words don't sound alike.
Reply:you have talent.


writing about it is a good way to relieve some stress. at least, it was for me.
Reply:I think the poem is well done, it appears to capture true anguish and pain.
Reply:Great !! I think that it's not so much a dark poem, as it is a release of feelings buried deep within your soul.... Do you have more? I would love to read them.
Reply:Although it is a bit depressing, in the same aspect it is beautiful. Nicely worded.
Reply:...i can rarely write happy poems....so i like your style...i thought it was very good and it makes perfect sense...i really like the pattern...= )

shamrock

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