This is a song a wrote a while back...?

This is one of my "not-that-great" songs, but I'm just putting it out there to see if my style is liked.. so thoughts?





I left my worries behind


I ended my life; now don't whine


I quit my crying; now it's fine


I've come to show you my real face





That day I saw you in the rain


N’ that day I found on the train


I couldn't even say


It's gonna be ok





I lay down and can't think


But it's ok, I'm simply fake


Like a manikin I can't dance


And I don't want to dance with you...





I want to climb the mountain side


, but when I tried I knew I died


Never gonna fly again


Don't even want to try again


Just want you to be my friend





Until the end


Until the end


Until the end


I can't try again


unless you'll just be my friend





I'm not gonna find real-life


I don't feel like looking tonight


I know you'll be around


I know you'll be sleeping- sound





To relaxed for to long


Friends say ‘so long


Skin gets too pale


Rubbing my head I feel


Like I can't feel


And that feels right.


And that feels right.


It's the perfect

This is a song a wrote a while back...?
i liked it you should write more
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