My poem... what do you think?

This poem is written during a fight that happened an hour ago, what I thought in that moment. I hope you guys understand me.





A poem with no name





Let the sun be my light


let the rain kiss my skin


don't let the dark soul catch me


don't let this emptiness take me in.





In my home my heart suffer


locked from the world I wished to know


away my dreams and desires flew


one of them is to feel my love's glow.





I lost my own self


Where did I go wrong?


cutting my veins won't help


killing me will take long.





Demons in my house are feeding me


I can feel both their essence


I suffered the agony now


since I don't have my father's presence.





"Why does my heart cry?


Why did God create me?"


Mysterious questions poison my mind


just one answer is all I need.





To love is all I wish


and to be loved too


I can see my freedom near


I know it will come soon.

My poem... what do you think?
you have a gift for putting things in a way that allow yourself to be understood. You've captured the angish your feeling and shared it with everyone. Good work and keep writting sometimes it can be a very useful outlet
Reply:its suckyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy... Even though its really pretty!Actually I changed my mind,I'm just jealous.I've always wanted to be a poet I just dont have the time or the talant.
Reply:Deep!
Reply:that was very good. you expressed your feelings perfectly i almost felt like i was there. great job.


keep up the good work.
Reply:Angel of San Juan, All you have to do and I know this is corny, but go out at night and look at the moon, I'll do the same, at least we can have that. Well both be looking at the same moon and well be that much closer together.





undercover poet
Reply:nice cuz i like it a lot
Reply:I love it!!!!!! NEVER stop writting......
Reply:Very Depressing, and not clear! By what I gather from your poem is you're young. Possibly a teenager. What happened an hour ago? With whom did you fight with, what sort of fight, and did someone die from this? You sound like you were conteplating sucicide and being tormented by demons. You know God loves you and you can be ''free''. Just pray to our " FATHER'' in heaven and ask JESUS to come into your heart and save you. He will help you when no one else will. Then----you will really be ''Free''. Cheer up!! Write a poem of happy things. Don't let Satan defeat you. Get out of that pit that you are in , and remember '' We all go through bad times'' but it's only temporary...GOD BLESS YOU!! Dodie
Reply:beautfull